The world is passing by,
With every minute you sigh,
Random thoughts muzzling the truth away,
No verdicts, no hearings for your say.
Minds humming with the shrillness of albatross,
All anxieties buildings up its smutty gross,
The Sombre of the night haunting your solace,
Burrying all the dues of how you carried your grace.
The sound of the falling stones broke the silence of night,
The commotion of the clashes growing bigger to your sight,
Each muffled murmur slightly gives a hint
That your flickering mirror gives your own glint.
Somewhere at the end, the thoughts will reach a standstill,
And the silence will grab your peace,
When mind goes blank,
And the world fast asleep,
And you’ll realize how alone you would be,
When no one is there to witness the disasters you see.
©fountainhues. All rights reserved.
Awesome poem, Ritz. I really like the underlying meaning that I fathom.
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Thank youu so much aquibview for appreciating my work😄😇
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My pleasure (You can call me only Aquib, minus the view. Lol).
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Haha sure 😀
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Yea, 6899 is also a cool pen name, if you ask me. Is it your debit card pin number?
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No, my Date of birth.
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Lol, yea. How was your 12th board’s ?
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Awesome lines ritzi , your poem gives a lot of poetic satisfaction 😘😘
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Thank youuu so much sujata ma’am, I feel overwhelmed to hear this from you❤❤
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Nice
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Thank you☺
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Amazing lines dear !!
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Thank youuu so muchh 😅❤
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Hey ritika, it is really nice. I liked it. By the way do check you mail.
Stay happy..stay high ❤❤❤
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Just loved it ❤ 👍
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Thank youuu so muchh😄😇
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Your choice of words & the flow both were nicely done…keep it up
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Thank youuu so much bhavana for your kind words 😇❤
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Beautifully told. Loved it
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Thank you so muchhh cayeshaar😄💙
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You are welcome. And you can call me Ayesha.😃😃
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Okayy sure 😅
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😃😃
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At 18 you are writing very good poems ,thoughtful and full of optimism interspread with pessimism. GREAT. GOD BLESS YOU
READ MY POEMS POSTS MEMORIES .YOU SHOULD LIKE THEM
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Thank youu so muchh sir 😊 your appreciation motivates me to write more 😇🌸
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So very true, with every breath you take something is happening. A magnificent way to open with such a profound statement. Mr. Sandman sure does make movies doesn’t he? Living the dream while we’re still asleep🙂. I loved reading every bit of this, great work!
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Thank you so much sir for your appreciation. 😄 I will try to get better with my work so that I am able to match your expectations everytime😄😇
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Your comment was flattering😂, especially the sir part. It was already awesome, to match my expectations is simply to write from the ❤️. This is for you. 🌹. For a lovely ode.
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I use sir because most of the people are elder than me here and obviously more experienced writers 😊
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Well lovely, I am on no higher ground than yourself as I consider myself your equal as we all are. 😊
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Great work Ritika! The way you used the words to go deep into the depth of human mind is amazing. Loved the read.. keep writing👍🏽
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Thank you so much, your appreciation motivates me to write more 😇😄
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Dauntlessly dangerous and beautiful
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Thank youu so muchh😇😆
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Beautifully portrayed! Reveals your deep thoughts and understanding. That shows up in many of your other poems as well. And yes, thanks so much for choosing to follow my blog!
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Thank you so muchh sir 😇 I hope you enjoy following my blog too😄
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Of course yes ritzee6899, it’s pretty creative and interesting! Keep it up! All the best!
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Best thing I read today Ritz … great work keep it up!!’
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Thank youu so muchh means a lot Sameer 😄😇
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By the way I would like to get few advices from you for my blog so can we talk on like email or insta or something if possible? Really appreciate your help!!
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That is really generous of you to ask for advice from me, but even I am new here, i don’t know if I could give valuable advice to you. I would suggest you to speak to some senior writers here regarding blog. I am sure it would be helpful 😊😄
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That is you just degrading your value here and that too for no reason. You really have a great passion in you and I just hope you could help me as I haven’t even reached your level yet. And as you know “A friend in need is a friend indeed.” So it would be really grateful of you if you could.
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I just read one of your posts and the article is beautiful, and your presentation too, I would just advise you to keep writing, if not possible daily, you can write it once in a week but just don’t leave it aside, it would get eventually even more beautiful.😊 and thank you for your kind words but we are all equal here😄
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Yes actually I would have written one post everyday but as I m in my 12th so I don’t get much time and so I have made up a rule for myself to posts one posts every week by any means. And so now I had just one more favour from you and that is whenever you get will you just give a read to all my blogs and I would certainly love any opinions or advice on those so that I can improve for better. Please that’s a humble request from my side and I’d be honoured if you’d do that for me. And yes thanks again for giving so much of your precious time to me by replying to my comments.😊😊
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Of course I would definitely read your posts, I find them really amazing. Even I have just passed 12th this year so I understand 😊
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By the way if you don’t mind answering these two questions:
Where do you get such good inspirations from and where are you basically from?😊
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Amazing one…great….keep up ritz!
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Thank youu so muchh 😄
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beautiful lines……
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Thank youu 😇😄
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Great !
I loved the flow of this poem !
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Thank youu means a lot 😇😄
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Nyc
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Very good poem ma’am, I am going to reblog this one for you.
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Thank youu soo muchhh 😀😄
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Reblogged this on Truth Troubles.
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Beautiful writing!
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Thank youu so muchh 🌹
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Lovely writing
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Thank you 😇
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Hey! It was lovely scrolling down your poem❤ It was indeed cherishing and pensive…I developed a connection with it!✌
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Thats the sole motive of the poem charu to make ppl feel connected.🌹 thank you so much❤
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Thanks for following my blog, which is much appreciated.
Best wishes, Pete.
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